So pretty damn epic, so since you asked for a critique there really isnt anything that i could find wrong with it.
The first thing i can point out is that well it dosnt look like there is motion, maka cosplayer dosnt look as if she is hitting him when it comes to her pose. But after all this is a static image so it would be hard to do so.
The expression of maka dosnt seem that angry (if she is trying to be anyway :3)
last thing is that the screen text dosnt look that good, maybe try making it more solid i dunno.
well this is just some little things i picked up on other then that it really does look awesome :3
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